REMOVE !

[KeNN]

REMOVE

[Kiper]

Shitz edit, rly don't like it. Music was okay, but stunts hmm, nothing special, looks like leftover stunts, yhh maybe 3/10 ? 

[Cookie]

Sorry, but the stunts and edit were pretty terrible.

[JustAdam]

Sorry, but the stunts and edit were pretty terrible.

[Determined]

Why'd you remove it?
It's ok if you get a bit of criticism, no need to take it to heart, I personally want to see it now & see if there's anyway I can help you improve on your shortcomings 

[MikeyMouse]

Why'd you remove it?
It's ok if you get a bit of criticism, no need to take it to heart, I personally want to see it now & see if there's anyway I can help you improve on your shortcomings 

I'm sure he won't mind 

GTA SA : I Remember [Duo]

[StrezZ]

Tbh it was pretty okay lol

[Determined]

Ahh thanks.

Aight, for starters, the colors weren't that bad, just don't use the strong overbright diffusion, lower the contrast a bit & don't make such a strong vignette, try to make it more subtle & don't blur the edges that much. I liked your idea of color gradients, but you should blend them better, play around with opacity & compositing, so it actually looks like an effect & not an overlay. Also, you should've altered the placement of the gradients, have it appear on various places of the screen, a lot of the time it felt a bit repetitive & seemed that they would fit much better in lower left or lower right. Work on your angles, don't move them around so sporadically, have a nice, slow singular motion that enhances the appearance of the stunt, always ask yourself if you're showing the stunt at its full potential & whether or not you're making it look better than it actually is. If you have camfucks in your angle where the camera goes out of the gameworld or gets really close because of an obstructing object, don't use it. Try refraining from using the border effects like that diagonal split screen, they really don't look good unless you execute them really well. I liked the wave effect, it seemed really fitting to the beat, take that as your starting ground & improve on such effects, try to combine them & shit to make them look really good. For the song you picked, there felt the need to be a lot more synchronizing & cutting. A good way to get a nice pace is to record multiple angles & make them cut from one another on beats of the song, as long as you keep them chronologically consistent unless you want to show them repeatedly. I also li9ked the shake effect on the opener, that was really fitting, you should've used more of that. And also, don't do that slow motion, it really looks choppy, at least put some heavy effects on it, so it looks better & have them fade out at the beat. Overall not as bad as everyone claims, but it definitely needs improvement. Keep it up though, don't be discouraged, it will take some time before you develop your style & I hope these pointers will ease that road for you a bit.

On to the stunts.
The one stunt I liked was the finisher, it looked pretty stylish, you could've added more spin to it, or a little backwards stoppie, but in general it was a cute little stunt. I also liked the grind at 00:15. When you search for spots, try to see what you can improve upon & never settle for random flukes, especially if they don't look that good. If as stunt goes wrong & you accidentally land something that could be good if executed better, it's a sign that you should change your direction & try to master that stunt, don't just settle for the fluke, improve & perfect your idea. Try to restrain from accepting bails & extremely short grinds, they really don't look that good & you might just end up spoiling someone's spot with those atrocities, keep it clean & smooth, if you want to impress you'll have to work on your execution, an idea won't get you anywhere if you don't devote your time for fulfilling it. For instance, the bump at 00:52, if you'd put some more time in it, you could've done a double bump to the roof & it would look a lot more impressive. But let's not stop here, let's evolve the idea. After double bumping you could make a grab or a spin on top of the building (holding lean back + right) & land that to the grind on the right. Now you've got a fucking stylish double bump to grind that people will definitely pick out & acknowledge that it's damn good!
Always think outside the box!

Again, don't be discouraged, just take my notes as a stepping stone & try to improve in every alley you can, don't settle & strive for perfection, good luck!

E: Here's a sketch-up for what I came up with for that spot:

 

[NEM]

Sorry, but the stunts and edit were pretty terrible.

[Cookie]

*Insert long-ass text here*

Now that's what I call constructive criticism! 

[Cooper]

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Now that's what I call constructive criticism! 

yeah man ! keep it up

[Ѕcavenger]

Kiper and alibay you little dishonest faggots. You started stunting too. Show me your first stuff!

My first stuff was landing the roof from skatepark, this was great for beginner!