13K - Breakthrough (Original Mix) What do you think?

[Blondz]

Hello GTAS,

I've been working on an Electronic House/Melodic House song for the last couple of days. I use Fruity Loops 9 XXL with Nexus, Massive and some other plug-ins.

I started making this song without thinking about it, and have re-done it a couple of times but now I'm pretty satisfied with it.

http://soundcloud.com/theofficial13k/13k-breakthrough-original-mix

Please let me know what you think of it? I thought it would be a good idea to show it to people I don't know IRL since you'll probably be more honest than people I know in my personal life.

Any ideas of improvement are appreciated.

Regards,

Blondz (13K is my musical alter-ego)