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General => General Discussion => Expression Section => Topic started by: Rahi on August 21, 2007, 12:09:56 PM

Title: Poems
Post by: Rahi on August 21, 2007, 12:09:56 PM

Always

Waking up
He did what he always does
Didn’t kiss his mom goodbye
Or say thanks to his pops

Walked to school/did what he always does
Had a snow fight with his friends
And asked about the night before
And how stoned he was

Entered the school
Did what he always does
Put his books up
And skipped first hour like he always does

He didn't see it coming
But it came so fast
Shouldn’t had skipped today
A bullet to the chest he didn't expect

Waking up
He saw his parent’s face
Blood everywhere
Always, always


EXTRA NOTES: You guys might know a song just like this.
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I will try to update this with new poems every now and then.

Title: Poems
Post by: StuntKing on August 21, 2007, 01:13:25 PM

me loiks what he saw..

Title: Poems
Post by: Eric on August 21, 2007, 01:24:37 PM

Always by Saliva, its...very obvious, but dude, needs a bit of structure work and getting the ideas in order, but its a great concept to tell you the truth, good job.

Title: Poems
Post by: Rahi on August 21, 2007, 04:14:07 PM

no not really.

I was thinking of that song by POD when I wrote it in class.

EDIT: POD- Youth Of The Nation